Although you are meant to present your thesis project in one month, your sister is getting married in Spain at the same time. You would like to change dates for your presentation. Write a letter to your professor. In your letter: · Explain the situation · Remind the professor of your academic achievements to date · Ask for a different date to present your thesis

Dear Prof. John
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, I am writing to you to request
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of my final
thesis
presentation
due to
the
date
clash with my sister's wedding on the same day in Spain. I have been informed
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your office that my
thesis
presentation
date
will be on February 20, 2024. My sister's wedding will be
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the same day in Spain. Since her marriage
date
is fixed six months earlier, all wedding arrangements are completed including booking of venue and catering. As you know, I have been appreciated not only for academic
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but
also
for
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submission of assignments.
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, I
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awarded the best student in the department
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last
year. Since my academic
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are
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not delayed in past years, I would like to request you
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extend
the
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my
thesis
presentation
date
. I will submit
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copy of my
thesis
this
week for
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review
also
. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Jennifer Ramos
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear main idea and expands on it appropriately, without digressing or providing excessive detail. Aim for clarity and conciseness.
task achievement
While the writing tone is mostly suitable, it is critical to provide more specific information regarding your achievements to bolster your request and maintain formal tone throughout.
task achievement
Directly address all the points in the prompt. The explanation of the situation needs to be clearer and the link between your academic achievements and the request for rescheduling could be made more explicitly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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