Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opionion.

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there are many interactions across different
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, especially when it involves people crossing national borders. Cultural adaptation needs to be done either by the visitors or the host
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. In my opinion, both
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are inevitable in the context of
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these scenarios. When visiting
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other countries, people should be aware of and respect the local customs. By doing
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, uncomfortable situations and conflicts could be avoided. Take
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cultures
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, there are certain
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that dress more modestly than
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others. If we
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to
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that
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, we should adjust
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how we dress so that they don't find our behaviour offensive. Adjuting to other
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to build an inter-cultural relationship which is an important part of
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. A visitor should bear the responsibility to adjust with the locals if they want the
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to have positive implications.
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, cultural adjustment should not only be done in
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one-way. When the number of visitors is huge,
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, in the case of migration or tourism,
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the host
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should embrace the differences and
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accommodate
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will ensure visitors will enjoy their
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and in return will provide a positive impact
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their nation.
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, tourists who enjoy their
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would spend more during their trip or a
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which needs foreign
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will have to make their culture more welcoming. As a host
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, welcoming other
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will be necessary in order to capitalise on the benefit of
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. In conclusion, adjusting
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by both parties will be unavoidable either deliberately or not. If we happen to do so,
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interactions will certainly have more positive implications in it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster mutual understanding
  • reverence
  • cultural clashes
  • peaceful coexistence
  • cultural immersion
  • authentic experience
  • cultural identity
  • enrich
  • pluralistic society
  • cultural exchange
  • tolerance
  • flexibility
  • international relations
  • global understanding
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