The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
The two pie charts give information about the comparison of different kinds of energy
production
of
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France in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, it can be seen that the proportion of all energy
production
stabled in two years.
To begin
in 1995 percentage of gas and coal
production
stood at 29,63% and 29,80 %. Following
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10 years they increased just to 1% for both of them.
In contrast
proportion of petro
production
was 29,27% at the beginning,
it
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fell
down
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approximately 10%
at the end
of the period. Nuclear
production
was 6.40% in 1995, which was 2% more than other energy
production
at the same time.
At the end
of
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period
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period,
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they almost 5% increased for both of them.
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