The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
The two pie charts give information about the comparison of different kinds of energy
production
of
France in 1995 and 2005. Change preposition
in
Overall
, it can be seen that the proportion of all energy production
stabled in two years.
To begin
in 1995 percentage of gas and coal production
stood at 29,63% and 29,80 %. Following next
10 years they increased just to 1% for both of them. Correct article usage
the next
In contrast
proportion of petro production
was 29,27% at the beginning, it
fell Correct word choice
and it
down
approximately 10% Change preposition
by
at the end
of the period.
Nuclear production
was 6.40% in 1995, which was 2% more than other energy production
at the same time. At the end
of Add an article
the period
period
they almost 5% increased for both of them.Add a comma
period,
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