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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The two pie charts give information about the comparison of different kinds of energy
production
Use synonyms
of
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in
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 France in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the proportion of all energy
production
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 stabled in two years.
To begin
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 in 1995 percentage of gas and coal
production
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 stood at 29,63% and 29,80 %. Following
next
Correct article usage
the next
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 10 years they increased just to 1% for both of them.
In contrast
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 proportion of petro
production
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 was 29,27% at the beginning,
it
Correct word choice
and it
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 fell
down
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by
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 approximately 10%
at the end
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 of the period. Nuclear
production
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 was 6.40% in 1995, which was 2% more than other energy
production
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 at the same time.
At the end
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 of
Add an article
the period
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period
Add a comma
period,
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 they almost 5% increased for both of them.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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