In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified.

Tobacco smoking has been unlawful in public parks, hospitals, restaurants and museums at the present time in several countries and numerous individuals
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supported
this
comprehensive law. I firmly
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with
this
idea because it prevents non-smokers from developing serious smoking-related
disease
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and encourages
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addicts to quit their habit. Making it illegal does make sense as it reduces the number of morbidity and mortality cases, and makes a good citizen &
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healthier nation. Passive smoking can lead to serious health conditions and exposure to it not only harms the individual inhaling it but
also
affects the people around them.
Second hand
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smoking is something that people cannot set aside in the presence of smokers and it leads to
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conditions like lung cancer, asthma, chronic obstructive pulmonary disease, nasal cavity cancer and
naso-pharyngeal
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nasopharyngeal
cancer. Restricted smoking
zone
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refrain people from getting exposed to passive smoking and
reduces
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the chances of getting diseases.
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, in 2007
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Kingdom
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introduced
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restricting smoking in public locations and after that, there was a significant decline
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smoking-induced cases and it now
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smoke-free
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zone.
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,
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smoking in public areas helps
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addicts to gradually quit their habit
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It encourages them to stop smoking and over time makes them more cognizant
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the harmful side effects of inhalation. If they ever want to smoke in these areas, they have to go outside or leave the company of associates, which often
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them feel excluded and leads to give up the smoke.
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of men and women are gradually
quiting
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quitting
smoking with the help of counseling, support and cutting nicotine on a daily basis, which is mainly generated by social pressure. In conclusion, passive smoking is
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to public health as it increases the risk of getting smoking-induced diseases and I believe that restricting it in public areas is indeed a good effort which helps to limit
this
type of exposure and contributes to
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a responsible citizens
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and reduces the number of smokers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • prevalence
  • respiratory issues
  • environmental pollution
  • litter
  • healthcare costs
  • smoking-induced illnesses
  • encourage smokers to quit
  • public health improvement
  • justified
  • public spaces
  • exposure
  • non-smokers
  • inconvenience
  • younger populations
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