In many countries, smoking is now illegal in public places. Many people believe that such a ban is justified.
Tobacco smoking has been unlawful in public parks, hospitals, restaurants and museums at the present time in several countries and numerous individuals
has
supported Change the verb form
have
this
comprehensive law. I firmly Linking Words
agrees
with Change the verb form
agree
this
idea because it prevents non-smokers from developing serious smoking-related Linking Words
disease
and encourages Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
the
addicts to quit their habit. Making it illegal does make sense as it reduces the number of morbidity and mortality cases, and makes a good citizen &Correct article usage
apply
a
healthier nation.
Passive smoking can lead to serious health conditions and exposure to it not only harms the individual inhaling it but Correct word choice
and a
also
affects the people around them. Linking Words
Second hand
smoking is something that people cannot set aside in the presence of smokers and it leads to Add a hyphen
Second-hand
life threatening
conditions like lung cancer, asthma, chronic obstructive pulmonary disease, nasal cavity cancer and Add a hyphen
life-threatening
naso-pharyngeal
cancer. Restricted smoking Correct your spelling
nasopharyngeal
zone
refrain people from getting exposed to passive smoking and Fix the agreement mistake
zones
reduces
the chances of getting diseases. Correct subject-verb agreement
reduce
For example
, in 2007 Linking Words
United
Kingdom Correct article usage
the United
had
introduced Unnecessary verb
apply
law
restricting smoking in public locations and after that, there was a significant decline Correct article usage
a law
of
smoking-induced cases and it now Change preposition
in
became
Wrong verb form
become
smoke-free
zone.
Correct article usage
a smoke-free
Furthermore
, Linking Words
Banned
smoking in public areas helps Wrong verb form
Banning
the
addicts to gradually quit their habitCorrect article usage
apply
.
It encourages them to stop smoking and over time makes them more cognizant Rephrase
gradually.
about
the harmful side effects of inhalation. If they ever want to smoke in these areas, they have to go outside or leave the company of associates, which often Change preposition
of
make
them feel excluded and leads to give up the smoke. Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
For example
, A recent study has shown that Linking Words
number
of men and women are gradually Correct article usage
a number
quiting
smoking with the help of counseling, support and cutting nicotine on a daily basis, which is mainly generated by social pressure.
In conclusion, passive smoking is Correct your spelling
quitting
cautious
to public health as it increases the risk of getting smoking-induced diseases and I believe that restricting it in public areas is indeed a good effort which helps to limit Correct word choice
crucial
this
type of exposure and contributes to Linking Words
make
Change the verb form
making
a responsible citizens
and reduces the number of smokers.Correct the article-noun agreement
responsible citizens
a responsible citizen
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