Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no doubt that modern means of communication have reduced the number of time inhabitants take to meet their
friend
. From here, Fix the agreement mistake
friends
this
has had a negative effect on their social relationship. However
, there are also
some benefit
from many of Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
Correct article usage
the connection
connection
.
I believe that virtual communication will have Fix the agreement mistake
connections
positive
impact on social Add an article
a positive
relationship
. Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
As we
are able to keep in touch with our friends who are in another country by messaging and Correct word choice
We
email
. In addition
, if we don't have phone
to send text massaging Add an article
a phone
the phone
with
them Change preposition
to
as well as
when they have some problem of
geographical location. We don’t have any opportunities in order to have a conversation with them until they go back home. Change preposition
with
Moreover
, it extremely facilitate
individuals who have Change the verb form
facilitates
a busy schedules
or time Correct the article-noun agreement
a busy schedule
busy schedules
constraint
.
Fix the agreement mistake
constraints
On the other hand
, that not
the reason to people always use Add a missing verb
is not
email
or messaging and forgot
a physical meeting. Wrong verb form
forget
For instance
, when they go to a cafe with their friends , they only care about their phone
. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
Besides
that, they are depending too much on social media is tantamount to have
a fake Wrong verb form
having
life
. Because, for example
, when a girl upload
her picture on Facebook or Instagram, Change the verb form
uploads
then
there are lots of boy
Change to a plural noun
boys
send
a text to her but her don’t know anyone and she even doesn’t meet them in real Correct pronoun usage
who send
life
.That makes humans only connect with everyone by email
, messaging
and don’t want to go outside.
In the end, I believe the modern Correct word choice
and messaging
many
of communication helps people a lot to connect with their friends or Correct your spelling
way
relative
in Fix the agreement mistake
relatives
long
distance. Correct article usage
a long
Nevertheless
, it also
makes people rely too much on email
or messaging and has had a negative effect on their social lives. We still maintain a balance between real life
and fake life
on the internet by messaging and email
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