The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The given
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provides information about the proportion of
water
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used for the various aims in six regions of the world.
According to
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the data,
water
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in all areas is used in three main ways:Industrial, agricultural and domestic uses. First of all, in Africa, Central and
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Asia the vast majority of
water
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is used for agricultural purposes, 84%, 88% and 81% respectively.
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, agriculture in South America
also
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ranks first in
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use with a massive 71
percent
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.
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, in
Europe
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Europe,
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water
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used for husbandry takes up approximately
one third
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of the total and in North America only 39%. Almost half of all
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areas
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is used for industry,
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in other places industrial use varies from 5 to 12 percent.
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,
water
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used for domestic use occupies an insignificant minority in Africa, Central Asia and South East Asia with 7-9
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. In other
regions
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regions,
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this
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rate reaches a little more than
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one-tenth
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one tenth
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one-tenth
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, but in South
America
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America,
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it is about one in four
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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