The charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
number
of UK graduate
and postgraduate students
who shun full-time work
after finishing their study
in 2008. Fix the agreement mistake
studies
Overall
Overall
, majority
of postgraduate and Correct article usage
the majority
graduates
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graduate
students
who did not work
full-time,
chose to continue their Remove the comma
apply
study
. The Fix the agreement mistake
studies
number
of graduate
students
who continued to
their Change preposition
apply
further
study
amounted Fix the agreement mistake
studies
29,665
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to 29,665
students
, while
there are
2,725 postgraduate Wrong verb form
were
students
who chose to continue their study
. On the other side, voluntary Fix the agreement mistake
studies
work
shown
a very small appeal to these Wrong verb form
shows
students
. Graduate
and postgraduate students
who took part-time job
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jobs
exceed
more than 19,000 Wrong verb form
exceeded
students
, making part-time
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the part-time
job
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jobs
as
the second most Change preposition
apply
favorite
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favourite
work
destination for UK graduate
and postgraduate students
in 2008.
Unemployment
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The unemployment
number
for graduates
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graduate
students
in 2008 also
shown
a critical condition. The Wrong verb form
showed
number
of Add a verb
unemployment is
unemployment was
unemployment
almost equal with those who took part-time Replace the word
unemployed
work
. However
, unemployed postgraduates
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postgraduate
students
illustrates
a better condition since it has Change the verb form
illustrate
huge
gap with those who took part-time Add an article
a huge
work
and further
study
. The ratio of unemployed graduate
students
are
larger than the Change the verb form
is
Correct your spelling
ratio
ration
rations
rationn
of unemployed postgraduate Correct your spelling
ratio
students
In conclusion, continue
to Wrong verb form
continuing
further
study
seems to have the biggest appeal for the UK
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UK's
freshly
graduates and Change the word
fresh
postgraduates
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postgraduate
students
in 2008, while
only few
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a few
students
interested
in Add a missing verb
are interested
the
voluntary Correct article usage
apply
work
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, overall, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, graduate, students, work, study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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