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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel’s customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel’s customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the
customer
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 gladdening levels survey results given to 100 clients of the Parkway Hotel in 2005 and 2010. It is noticeable that the level of
customer
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 satisfaction increased substantially in
those two timeline
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that two timeline
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, the majority number of Parkway Hotel guests described its
customer
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 service as satisfactory and poor in 2005, but the data in 2010 shows most customers thought that the hotel’s
customer
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 service was good and excellent.
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, in 2005, the highest
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 emotion toward the service was satisfactory which accounted for 45
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percent
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 of the chart.
Then
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poor
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 comes behind with 21
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percent
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, following that we have the very poor, good and excellent make up 15, 14, and 5
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percent
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 respectively. Despite how bad that was for people who visited Parkway Hotel, in 2010 data for good emotion was significantly increased and was the highest client evaluation with 39
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percent
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per cent
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.
Next,
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the excellent reviews grew by 23
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percent
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, making it take place in the top two positive commentaries in 2010 with 28
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percent
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. And
lastly
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were
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satisfactory, poor, and very poor criticisms take up 17,12, and 4
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percent
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 for each.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words customer, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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