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You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: -give details of your visit to the restaurant -explain the reason for the celebration -say what was good about the celebration WRITE AT LEAST 150 WORDS

#friends #restaurant #occasion #food #service #manager #-give #visit #-explain #reason #celebration #-say
Dear Sir or Madam,  I am writing
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i
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were
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 very pleased with the food and service for my friend's birthday
celebration
 yesterday
on
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17 January 2024.  On the day we came to the restaurant, we
welcomed
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 very well by the waitress. He ushered us to our reservation
placed
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, exactly like we asked for. The position was
convinient
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convenient
 and
on
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good
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 view, so it
nice
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 to
taking
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photo
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.  It is quite hard to find
restaurant
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a restaurant
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 in
this
 area that can provide
table
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a table
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 for 15 people
at
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 the same day. But, thankfully
i
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 called here and can
got
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place
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a place
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 for our
celebration
.  My friend's birthday
celebration
 went well and exciting. The food that we ordered was delicious, and we
also
 got
free
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 mini birthday cake and snacks for our
celebration
. I will
recomend
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recommend
 the restaurant to my other friends so they can have a good experience too
in
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here. 
Your
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 sincerely, Juli
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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure of your letter, make sure to organize your thoughts clearly in each paragraph and use transitional phrases to connect them smoothly.
coherence cohesion
For the greeting and closing of your letter, use more specific and formal language appropriate to the context, such as 'Dear Manager,' if the name is unknown, and 'Yours faithfully,' (if you began with 'Dear Sir/Madam,') or 'Yours sincerely,' (if the name is known) for the closing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea and expands on it adequately before moving on to the next point.
task achievement
Fully address the task by providing more detailed information about each point mentioned in the prompt. For example, give specific examples of what made the food and service pleasing and how they contributed to the overall success of the celebration.
task achievement
Maintain a suitable writing tone by using more varied and advanced vocabulary and sentence structures to match the formality of writing to a restaurant manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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