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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development on the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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As of present, the industrial
area
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 of Norbiton lies just outside the town to the west. The
area
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 is connected to a main straight road stretching west and east, an intersection with a north
path
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 leading to the industrial site. It consists of 8 factories; 3 surround the central roundabout, and 4 line the connected road leading east, the final factory lying
at the end
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 of the
path
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. The cluster of buildings generally sits adjacent to a
river
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 up north, with farmland lying just on the other side. The main plan for the future of the
area
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 is to renovate it from an industrial location to a place more suitable as a commercial &
residential
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and residential
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 centre. The intersection will
instead
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 be replaced with a smaller roundabout, though the paths will generally remain the same; stretching west, east and north. There will be no factories in the new plot of land.
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, to start with, shops and a medical centre will be placed around the roundabout. The eastern road from the large central roundabout will still exist
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 but will be lined
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 with housing for residents, and the end of the
path
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 will have a school for children,
in contrast
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 to a factory. Midway along
this
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 eastern
path
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, a northern walkway will be built leading to a playground plot. In terms of completely new installations, two new roads will be laid stretching from the main roundabout. A northwestern
path
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, with two spaces for housing along the way, and a north
path
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, with a housing square on the side. The main purpose of the northern
path
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,
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, is to connect the farmland and the town
area
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, with a new bridge to be built over the
river
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. Larger space for housing will
also
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 be built on the other side of the
river
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. In summary, the final renovation of the industrial
area
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 will contain 7 plots of land for residential housing spaces, a space for shops, a medical centre, a playground &
school
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and school
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,
as well as
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 a bridge to cross over the north
river
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, path, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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