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The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors' contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The two pie
chart
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charts
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 provide
infromation
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information
 about how different industry sectors contributed to the
economy
 of
Turkey
 in the
year
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years
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of
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apply
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2000 and 2016.
Overall
, the agriculture
sector
 had the highest percentage of contribution in 2000
while
,
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 healthcare and education
became
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contributed
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 the
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 to the
economy
 in 2016.
To begin
 with,
agriculture
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the agriculture
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sector
 accounted for 24./. in 2000 and it
deacresed
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decreased
 to 14./. in 2016. It can
be notice
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 that
construction
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sector
 contributed the least to the
economy
 of
Turkey
 only 3./. in 2000 and it went up reached
to
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10./. in 2016. Healthcare and education were the second
popular
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most popular
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sector
 support
economy
 of
Turkey
 in 2000
accounted
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accounting
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 for 17 ./. and it remained the same in 2016. It is
interseting
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interesting
 to notice that At the beginning of the period, manufacturing and finance, business and other services made up 8% and 5% of
Turkey
's
economy
, respectively, and these figures rose to 12% and 8% in 2016.
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