The given bar chart shows the difference of the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian cities between 2001 and 2006.

The given bar chart shows the difference of the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian cities between 2001 and 2006.
The diagram above demonstrates statistics regarding the varied portion of international learners among Canadian
universities'
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graduates in different cities from 2001 to 2006. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the figure of global students who graduated from all Canadian universities in 2001 is considerably fewer in proportions compared to the year 2006, with Alberta colleges as the sole exception. In 2001, the percentage of worldwide graduates from tertiary education located in New Brunswick was the highest at approximately 7% followed by Nova Scotia and Quebec at above 5%.
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, Alberta has a share of 4%,
while
British Columbia, Manitoba, Newfoundland
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Labrador, and Ontario possessed a slightly
fewer
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figure proportionally. Comparatively, 2006 witnessed a growing number of
overall
percentages with New
Burnswick
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with the largest share of above 10%,
as well as
British Columbia and Nova Scotia's higher education institutions. Following behind, Quebec has
also
elevated to around 8% in proportion
along with
other regions just below it. Presenting a notably contrast pattern, Alberta's universities have diminished their portion of international learners to just under 5%, which was the lowest among all cities.
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