The chart bellow shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999

The chart bellow shows the different  level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999
The bar chart given
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illustrates
the percentage of
males
and
females
which skilled
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different levels of qualifications in Australia in 1999.
Overall
, it can be seen that, expect undergraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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and bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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males
had more
participances
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participation
in skilled vocational
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diplomas
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, postgraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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, and
masters
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master's
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degree
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degrees
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than
females
. first of all, we observe a significant difference between
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men
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and
woman
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women
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which was 80
percent
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in skilled vocational
diploma
.
Moreover
, the pattern of both
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groups was the same
in
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for
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postgraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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and master's
degree
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degrees
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which
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was 70 and 60 for
males
and 30 and 40 for
females
.
On the other hand
, we see the most popular
degree
among
famales
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females
families
which was
undergraduate
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an undergraduate
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diploma
and was 70.
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males
dedicated just about 35
percent
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in
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this
degree
.
Additionally
, bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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allocated
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50
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to 50
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percent
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of
females
and 45
percent
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per cent
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of
males
.
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