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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graphs depict information about import
cost
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 in New Zealand from two different countries, broken down into ten consecutive periods from 1994 to 2004. Units are measured in
NZ
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$
million
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.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that
imports
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 value from
Australia
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 have an upward trend,
while
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imports
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 from
Japan
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 have a downward trend.
Furthermore
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, it is
also
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 interesting to note that
imports
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 number from
Australia
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 is higher than in
Japan
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 both in the first year and
at the end
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 of
period
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. In terms of the cost
for
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of
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imports
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, in 1994,
Australia
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has
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had
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 the
higher
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highest
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 figure at almost 4000
NZ
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$
million
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 compared with
Japan
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 which accounted for 3000
NZ
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$
million
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. These figures
then
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 consistently fluctuated before experiencing
the
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 dip in 1999, achieving 3000
NZ
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$
million
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 for
imports
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 from
Australia
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 as opposed to
Japan
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 which has slightly more than 4000
NZ
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$
million
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.
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, in comparison with
Japan
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,
Australia
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 has remained the highest proportion
for
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of
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imports
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 at 8000
NZ
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$
million
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 in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nz, million, imports, australia, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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