The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph depicts changing
of
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in
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energy
production
between 1995 and 2005 year in France. It is evident from data that there is a decrease in perto
consumption
,
while
production
of
remained
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flues grew. The biggest change
show
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other
energy
consumption
,
while
gas and coal
production
remained unchanged. It is interesting to note that the most remarkable difference is in
consumption
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the consumption
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of nuclear
energy
.
Production
of nuclear
energy
rose
for
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approximately 4
percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
petro
production
had decreased by 2005
for
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almost 10%.
Overall
, in
a
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year 1995 gas, coal and
petro
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petrol
had almost equal partition, and all together occupied 90% of all
production
.
Also
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coal and gas
production
remained relatively the same, changed
for
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by
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just 1
percent
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per cent
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. On
other
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the other
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hand, other
energy
sources
consumption
was just a 5
percent
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per cent
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fraction
,
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and almost doubled becoming 9,10
percent
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per cent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production, consumption, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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