The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line chart depicts how households in a country allocate their weekly income between 1968 and 2018.
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, food expense was the most dominant by far in 1968, and leisure and housing
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were the most significant expenditures for the year 2018.
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, the
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of fuel and power
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was the lowest for both years. In 1968, the most dominant spending was food with just over a third of the total and
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proportion
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followed
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by the percentages of housing and garment expenses with 10% each.
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the
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of fuel and power category was the lowest with around 6%, the percentages of transportation, household items, and personal goods were just under a tenth each. After fifty years, food
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lost
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roughly half of the previous
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and dramatically dropped to about 17%.
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the
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of leisure spending became the highest expenditure category with just over a fifth, housing increased to just under a fifth of
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, demonstrating the second-highest. The
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of remaining categories varied between approximately 3% and 10% in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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