You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, Which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your lette say what the participants liked about the hotel explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what manager should do to improve the food in future.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to discuss about
that the Remove the preposition
apply
last
month conducted meeting
at your Add an article
a meeting
hotel
. I am going to give feedback about the hotel
and it's
services, Replace the word
its
available
facilities at that time.
Your Correct word choice
and available
hotel
's architecture mostly
liked by Add a missing verb
is mostly
participants
. Your hotel
service was good while
compared to Correct word choice
apply
other
Change the wording
another hotel
other hotels
hotel
. I have organised meeting
at your Add an article
a meeting
hotel
for my company which took
place in a meeting hall Wrong verb form
will take
is
good to feel. The meeting Correct pronoun usage
which is
hall
strength is 200 Change noun form
hall's
seats
capability. Change the noun form
seat
Also
Add a comma
Also,
this facilities
were liked by Change the determiner
this facility
these facilities
participants
. The sound system that you have arranged in meeting
hall is very good. And Correct article usage
the meeting
also
air circulation was very fine(A/C facilities). At that time, the food
was serving
by robots Wrong verb form
served
were
good to feel.
During Correct subject-verb agreement
was
lunch time
, the Correct your spelling
lunchtime
food
was serving
by robots to Wrong verb form
served
participants
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
unforgottable
. But the quality of the Correct your spelling
unforgivable
food
was not good.Because it's
taste is Correct your spelling
its
worst
. And Correct article usage
the worst
also
the contamination was found in that lunch . The participants
feel uncomfortable in their stomach
. The Fix the agreement mistake
stomachs
food
that was served for lunch is
not boiled well. Because they added calcium to Wrong verb form
was
food
for
whiten the rice.
I hope, you will add Change preposition
to
cctv
coverage for your Correct your spelling
CCTV
hotel
kitchen to improve the quality of food
and you have to give proper training to your cheff
.
Thanking You,
Yours faithfully,Correct your spelling
chef
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greeting and closing
Start your letter with a proper greeting such as 'Dear Hotel Manager,' and always end with an appropriate closing such as 'Sincerely,' followed by your name. Remember that a too casual tone might not be appropriate for writing to a hotel manager. Aim for a respectful and polite tone throughout.
logical structure
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear idea or point. The paragraphs about the hotel's services and facilities are somewhat mixed and could be organized better. Separate ideas into distinct paragraphs for clarity.
single idea per paragraph
Keep the paragraphs concise and focused on a single topic for improved clarity. Avoid mixing compliments and complaints in the same paragraph, and ensure that each paragraph logically flows into the next.
complete response
Fully address all parts of the task. While your letter does mention what participants liked and why they were unhappy, your suggestions for improvements should be clearer and more actionable. Instead of vague advice, give specific suggestions that relate directly to the food issue for a more complete response.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a suitable writing tone by being more formal and polite. Phrases like 'food was serving by robots were good to feel' are informal and awkwardly phrased. Use clear, respectful language that would be expected in professional correspondence.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
