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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The six charts give information about six regions'
water
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 usage for three different types of uses, measured in percentage.
Overall
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,
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 for the agricultural sector dominates the majority of
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 usage proportion,
while
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 Domestic Use is relatively less in consumption. To commence with, in South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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,
water
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 used for agriculture is around forty-five per cent of the total amount.
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, only in North
America
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 and Europe, it used is approximately a third in ratio. Industrial sector intake is the biggest ratio of
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 used, in North
America
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 and South
America
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, at half on average. Meanwhile,
water
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 for Domestic Use in all the areas does not exceed a fifth of total usage, with the highest in South
America
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 at 19%.
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, the Industrial Use in South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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 are under 10%, except the South East
Asia
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 at 12%.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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