The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The diagrams illustrate the way in which
cement
and concrete are manufactured.
Overall
, the production of
cement
consists of the usage of distinct tools
such
as a crusher, mixer, rotating heater, and grinder,
while
four materials are utilized for concrete production.
To begin
with, the limestone and clay are transformed into powder through a crusher, which later passes to the rotation heater by using a machine called a mixer. After that, the rotating heater melts and rotates the powder and
then
the grinder is used to make
cement
from heated and rotated powder. The
last
step of the process is pouring
cement
into bags for packaging. Moving onto concrete manufacturing, different elements are used to produce it including
cement
, water, sand, and gravel which consists of small stones. The corresponding figures for these raw materials are 15%, 10%, 25%, and 50% respectively.
Finally
, all of them are put into a concrete mixer to make the end product which is the concrete.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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