Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Students want to learn additional
subjects
in addition
to the main subject at some universities. On the other hand
, I believe that there is a need for more involvement in the main subject for a good qualification. In this
essay, we will discuss both of these views, and I will try to explain my point of view.
The first point of view is that additional subjects
are required for students' mental development, and they would be essential for every learner due to
the competition era. Without an extra curriculum, they cannot showcase their inner talent. They will foster their inner talent when they understand their inner talent. This
success will come in a very short time
. For example
, for school going students are studying text book
with some scientific and Correct your spelling
textbook
arts
type of staffs Change the noun form
art
then
they will better which subject they have interest
Correct article usage
an interest
and
in future they will be master on favourite.
Change preposition
in and
On the other hand
, some people believe that the extra subjects
are a kind of burden for those involved in studying. Because of if they give their afford to the extra topic then
time
will be waste
for them in main Wrong verb form
wasted
subjects
. Right now job seekers are taking skillful and expert for the require
post. For that reason, if they are Change the verb form
required
involving
in multitasking Wrong verb form
involved
then
it will be very true they cannot give us quality feedback. For
Change preposition
Instead
instead
, if a space engineer week in football playing
Verb problem
apply
then
they cannot touch in
Change preposition
apply
the
both expertise or they will be Remove the article
apply
expert
Fix the agreement mistake
experts
in
one side.
Change preposition
on
To sum up
, multitasking is a kind of tool for average people however
if any one
Correct your spelling
anyone
want
to become Change the verb form
wants
a
skilful Correct article usage
apply
then
need concentration
Replace the word
concentrate
in
one point Change preposition
on
then
it possible
. Add a missing verb
is possible
Moreover
, my observation quality is an
essential for Change the article
apply
long
Correct your spelling
long-term
time
success. So do not waste time
for
extra curriculum.Change preposition
on
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