The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.

The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
The diagram illustrates the way
rainwater
is collected and processed into drinking
water
in a town in Australia.
Overall
, it involves five main steps for
rainwater
to turn into drinking
water
.
Firstly
, the
rainwater
will fall directly into the drain during rainy days. All the drains at the housing area are
inter-connected
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to a
water
filter.
Th
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The
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water
filter will
then
filter the
rainwater
accordingly
and
placed
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place
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it into a
water
storage. There is a pipe which is used to send the storage
water
to another tank for
water
treatment. In the
water
treatment tank, chemicals are added to the
water
to ensure that the
water
is safe for human use and consumption. At the final step,
water
which is ready for use will
then
go through the pipe and
to
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be sent to different houses. The most common use of
water
is for drinking, cleaning and showering.
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