The charts give information about the proportions of boys and girls of a school who achieved high grades (A or B +) in respective courses. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about the proportions of boys and girls of a school who achieved high grades (A or B +) in respective courses. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the changes in the percentages of
boys
and
girls
gaining impressive grades in five different subjects in 1996 and 2000.
Overall
, there were distinct gender differences across these five disciplines: science underwent an improvement in the performance of
girls
,
while
the arts and humanities had a higher
proportion
of high-performing
boys
. The percentage of high-achieving
boys
was generally higher than that of
girls
in 2000. Humanities saw the most considerable increase in the
proportion
of high-achieving
boys
, becoming the top-performing course, with the figure nearly doubling to 45% in 2000.
By comparison
, the figure for
girls
dropped by 8% to 25%. Similar changes happened to the arts, in which the percentage of
boys
who gained high scores rose significantly to 22%, and the figure for
girls
slightly declined to 25%. Languages were another area which experienced a drop in the percentage of high-achieving
girls
, down to 31%,
while
the
proportion
of high-achievers for
boys
remained unchanged at about 21%. There were contrasting patterns in the performance of science and maths for both genders. Around one-third of the
boys
obtained satisfying grades in these science courses in 1996, higher than the figures for other subjects.
However
, only around 18% and 17% reached
this
level in 2000.
In contrast
, the
proportion
of high-achieving
girls
in these two courses climbed to 11% and 15% respectively,
although
these figures were still far lower than those for the other three areas.
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