The chart below show the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reportin the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reportin the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate the
percentage
of Australian
female
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females
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and
male
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males
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of education background in five types of qualifications in 1999. The
percentage
of female’s Bachelor’s
degree
was higher than male’s
percentage
by about 10%.
However
, men have
higher
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proportion in the higher
educations
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education
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(postgraduate
diploma
and Master’s
degree
). In postgraduate
diploma
,
male
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males
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account for 70%, but the
percentage
of
post graduated
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women was around 30%.
Additionally
, the proportion of men in studied
in
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master’s
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a master’s
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degree
was 60%. It was higher than the
percentage
of
female
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females
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who
has
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have
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a master’s
degree
by 20%.
Overall
, in the case of skilled vocational
diploma
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diplomas
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and undergraduate
diploma
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diplomas
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, opposite patterns are observed based on gender. Men’s skilled vocational
diploma
was
highest
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the highest
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percentage
to compare
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compared
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with other qualifications. Meanwhile, the proportion of women’s skilled vocational
diploma
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diplomas
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was
lowest
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the lowest
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point.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, degree, diploma with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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