The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart gives information about the proportion of electricity used and greenhouse gas realised within six household appliances in
australia
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Australia
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.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that energy used and gases realised
is
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are
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almost similar for water heating and cooling
although
one is at
highest
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the highest
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and the other at
lowest
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the lowest
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.
To begin
with, electronics used for heating
consumed
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consume
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just over two-fifths of electricity but
produces
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produce
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only less than a fifth of greenhouse emissions,
however
, water heating is seen to be almost one-third in both
the
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areas. For other
appliances
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appliances,
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it uses only 15% of energy but produces twice
of
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apply
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that of greenhouse gas. Moving forward, there is seen very less change in the
remaing
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remaining
three devices. Both refrigeration and lighting
emits
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emit
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twice of gases
than
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as
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the energy used which is 14% and 8%.
In
contrast
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contrast,
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cooling remained unchanged staying under 5%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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