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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of three types of nutrients taken across all meals in the USA, it might cause health problems if eating too much any of these nutrients. The percentage of
sodium
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 and saturated fat across 4 meals share a similar pattern. People eat
sodium
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 and saturated fat the most
in
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at
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 dinner, which take up 43% and 37% respectively. Lunch ranks
the
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second among all meals, having 29% for
sodium
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 and 26% for saturated fat.
Breakfast
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have
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 the smallest
amount
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, where only 14% of
sodium
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 and 16% of fat are eaten in the
breakfast
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. In regards to the snacks, more
saurated
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saturated
 fat
are
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is
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 taken
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then
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than
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sodium
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. In terms of
the
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added
sugar
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, the largest
amount
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 of added
sugar
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are
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is
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 taken from
the
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snacks, which accounts for 42% of total
sugar
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 consumption, followed by
the
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dinner with
the
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a
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 percentage of 23%. The percentage of
sugar
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 taken in
breakfast
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 and lunch
are
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is
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 similar, having around 17% of the total daily added
sugar
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amount
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.
Overall
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, people consume the biggest
amount
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 of nutrients during dinner and they eat the least in
breakfast
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, breakfast, amount, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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