The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates the largest, lowest and average employee earnings across 5 different industries in 2009. In terms of the maximum salary

amount

, the

finance

industry

ranked first at

the

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$8850, which was almost twice as much as that of the transportation sector.

In addition

, the maximum earning in the hospitality

industry

was the lowest,($2900). Construction and manufacturing had a similar

amount

at around $3300. In regards to the minimum earning level, the

finance

sector ranked

the

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first with $1600, followed by manufacturing, which figure was at $930. The

amount

of transportation, hospitality and construction

were

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was

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lower than $900.

Moreover

, the average

amount

varied slightly

amoung

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among

all sectors except the

finance

industry

, which had the largest average earning with more than $5000,

wheares

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whereas

wheres

, the other sectors had no more than $3000. The lowest average salary was $1895 in the hospitality sector.

Overall

, the

finance

industry

earned the most, having the number ranking in

the

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first place across all three categories. It's

also

clear that

construction

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the construction

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insdustry

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industry

had the biggest differences between the maximum and minimum earnings.

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