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The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the largest, lowest and average employee earnings across 5 different industries in 2009. In terms of the maximum salary
amount
, the
finance
industry
 ranked first at
the
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$8850, which was almost twice as much as that of the transportation sector.
In addition
, the maximum earning in the hospitality
industry
 was the lowest,($2900). Construction and manufacturing had a similar
amount
 at around $3300. In regards to the minimum earning level, the
finance
 sector ranked
the
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first with $1600, followed by manufacturing, which figure was at $930. The
amount
 of transportation, hospitality and construction
were
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 lower than $900.
Moreover
, the average
amount
 varied slightly
amoung
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among
 all sectors except the
finance
industry
, which had the largest average earning with more than $5000,
wheares
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whereas
wheres
, the other sectors had no more than $3000. The lowest average salary was $1895 in the hospitality sector.
Overall
, the
finance
industry
 earned the most, having the number ranking in
the
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first place across all three categories. It's
also
 clear that
construction
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the construction
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insdustry
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industry
 had the biggest differences between the maximum and minimum earnings.
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