The table presents how much people from five employment sectors earned, in three different salary levels in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates the largest, lowest and average employee earnings across 5 different industries in 2009. In terms of the maximum salary

amount

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, the

finance

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industry

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ranked first at

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$8850, which was almost twice as much as that of the transportation sector.

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, the maximum earning in the hospitality

industry

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was the lowest,($2900). Construction and manufacturing had a similar

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at around $3300. In regards to the minimum earning level, the

finance

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sector ranked

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first with $1600, followed by manufacturing, which figure was at $930. The

amount

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of transportation, hospitality and construction

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lower than $900.

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, the average

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varied slightly

amoung

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among

all sectors except the

finance

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industry

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, which had the largest average earning with more than $5000,

wheares

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whereas

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, the other sectors had no more than $3000. The lowest average salary was $1895 in the hospitality sector.

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, the

finance

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industry

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earned the most, having the number ranking in

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first place across all three categories. It's

also

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clear that

construction

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the construction

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insdustry

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industry

had the biggest differences between the maximum and minimum earnings.

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