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The bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years.

The bar chart shows the proportion of people aged over 65 years old in Germany, Canada, and the UK over a period of 50 years.
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The bar chart illustrates the
percentage
 of the elderly aged over 65 in Germany, Canada, and the UK over
a
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five decades. All three countries have
same
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 increasing trends in the
percentage
 of the elderly,
however
in
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 different paces. Germany, the most aged
population
 in terms of
percentage
, has moderately
increase
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proportion
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the proportion
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 of aged
citizen
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citizens
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 from 15% in 1980 to 20% in 2000. By 2030, one-fourth of Germans are elderly.
UK
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The UK
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 is experiencing rapid
growth
 in
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the aging
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aging
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ageing
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population
 too. In the first two decades, the
growth
are
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 subtle.
However
, the
growth
 from 2000
are
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 trebled from the previous period, predicted to be just below
25
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the 25
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% mark in
the
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2030. Canada, the least aged
population
in
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of
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 the three countries in
beginning
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, has the greatest and the fastest
growth
 of aged populations over the five decades to 22%,
doubled
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 the
percentage
 of just
as of
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10% in 1980. That's surpassing the proportion of
aged
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the aged
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population
 in the UK.
To sum up
, Germany is the most aged society
off
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 all time. In
term
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 of pace, Canada has
a
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fastest growing
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fastest-growing
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 pace in elderly
percentage
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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