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The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The line chart illustrates data on the ratio of vegetarian teenagers in the UK between 1960 and 2020.
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 the graph, the ratio of UK adolescents with a vegetarian
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 increased dramatically between 1960 and 1970 and despite a significant drop after
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1980. Between 1960 and 1980, the proportion of British teenagers following a vegetarian
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 increased dramatically to around 15% in 1980, the highest proportion of young people following a vegetarian
diet
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 in the UK. After 1980 , there was a decrease significant .In 1990, the number of teenagers decreased slightly and
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 gradually increased until 2000.10 years later, the vegetarian
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always slightly increased, about 10%-12%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words diet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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