The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There are two bar charts provided that
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give
the
information about some Correct article usage
apply
type
of activities that are chosen by undergraduate and graduate Fix the agreement mistake
types
students
after they finished their study
in the UK, in 2008. The Fix the agreement mistake
studies
type
of activities are divided into 4 categories. Fix the agreement mistake
types
Overall
, in decreasing order, either the undergraduates or postgraduates, the type of activities they were content were further
study
, part-time work
, unemployment, and voluntary work
.
From the first table, it indicates that, after graduate
, 29,665 undergraduate Replace the word
graduation
students
wanted to continue their study
, taking Fix the agreement mistake
studies
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a high
high level
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high-level
degree
to become postgraduate Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
students
. Furthermore
, part-time work
and unemployment were the next larger
group; the data were Correct word choice
largest
around
17,735 and 16,235 undergraduate Change preposition
from around
students
, respectively. In contrast
, voluntary work
was the activity that got the least attention, as it only accounted around
3,500 undergraduate Change preposition
for around
students
who wanted to take this
activity.
From the
second table, Change preposition
The
it
illustrates that the amount of postgraduate Correct pronoun usage
apply
students
in this
bar chart were
all worth significantly less than the undergraduate. The postgraduate Correct subject-verb agreement
was
students
who wanted to take another round of study
were around 2,725 people
. The part-time work
had a slightly amount after further
study
, around 2,535 people
. It gives the same trend as the undergraduates, as for
unemployment, accounted for 1,625 Change preposition
apply
people
and only 345 people
interested
in taking voluntary Add a missing verb
were interested
work
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