The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There are two bar charts provided that
giving
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the
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information about some
type
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types
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of activities that are chosen by undergraduate and graduate
students
after they finished their
study
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studies
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in the UK, in 2008. The
type
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types
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of activities are divided into 4 categories.
Overall
, in decreasing order, either the undergraduates or postgraduates, the type of activities they were content were
further
study
, part-time
work
, unemployment, and voluntary
work
. From the first table, it indicates that, after
graduate
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, 29,665 undergraduate
students
wanted to continue their
study
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studies
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, taking
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a high
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high level
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degree
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degrees
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to become postgraduate
students
.
Furthermore
, part-time
work
and unemployment were the next
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group; the data were
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17,735 and 16,235 undergraduate
students
, respectively.
In contrast
, voluntary
work
was the activity that got the least attention, as it only accounted
around
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3,500 undergraduate
students
who wanted to take
this
activity.
From the
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second table,
it
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apply
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illustrates that the amount of postgraduate
students
in
this
bar chart
were
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all worth significantly less than the undergraduate. The postgraduate
students
who wanted to take another round of
study
were around 2,725
people
. The part-time
work
had a slightly amount after
further
study
, around 2,535
people
. It gives the same trend as the undergraduates, as
for
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unemployment, accounted for 1,625
people
and only 345
people
interested
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were interested
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in taking voluntary
work
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, study, work, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.

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