The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar charts below provide information concerning the destination of UK bachelor's and master's degree

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excluding full-time jobs after graduating in 2008. The data can be divided into two parts, namely the number that experienced an upward trend and a downward trend. Figures are given in quantities of

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, it can be clearly seen that the rate of graduates and postgraduates who preferred voluntary work,

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study, and unemployment are very similar except for people who work

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. The first thing to consider is the number of bachelor's degree

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who chose charity jobs, extended studying, and blankness is around 1,000 per cent of master's degree

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. The former are 3,500, 29,665, and 16,235

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the latter are 345, 2,725, and 1,625 respectively. The exceptional thing is the quantities of people who worked as part-time jobs are a lot different which are 17,735 for graduates and 2,535 for postgraduates.

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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too.

some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. otehrs argie that it is better to try and improved such situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion