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One problem faced by almost every large country is traffic congestion. What do you think are the cause of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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In
modern
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 era, many countries in the world are now facing the
problem
 of
traffic
 congestion.
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problem
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 and the solutions to it. The major root
to
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this
problem
 is the rapid increase in population of the world.
This
 leads to
the
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 rise in the number of personal
vehicles
,
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 because people want to travel conveniently by themselves. The more motorbikes and cars, the heavier the
traffic
 in cities are. Another cause
to
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 it is the infrastructure not being able to fully accommodate the
traffic
 issue. Buses and trains are not only unable to reach many places, some of them are already degraded. The road
systems
also
 become a part of the
problem
 since many of them were not well-maintained, leading to the appearance of potholes and broken
traffic
 lights, slowing down the flow of
traffic
 and causing congestion. There are many solutions that can help
solving
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this
 issue, the best one of them is enhancing the infrastructure. Public
transports
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transport
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 should be more prioritised, with upgraded
vehicles
, new routes and separate lanes for them. With buses and trains
become
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 more convenient to use, they will become a better choice in people’s
mind
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 and help
reducing
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 the number of personal
vehicles
 on the street. Upgraded road
systems
 and
traffic
 light
systems
 will
also
 be a big help
on
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 solving
this
 issue because they make the
traffic
working
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 more smoothly.
Additionally
, we can
also
 restrict parking in busy streets, In conclusion,
traffic
 congestion is mainly caused by the population increase and the degradation of the infrastructure. The best solution for
this
problem
 is to upgrade the
traffic
systems
 to reduce the number of personal
vehicles
 on the road.
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