The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps
informs
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us about the current
site
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of Norbiton town’s industrial area
,
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and the planned future development of the
site
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. From the planned
site
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development map, it is shown that all of the factories will be replaced
for
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housing areas.
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, there will be the addition of several public infrastructures,
along with
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new roads. In the future development of the
site
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, it is planned that there will be a total of seven housings
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the
site
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. Most of them will be built in the current area,
although
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there will
one
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housing across the river. As
the
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result, there will be three new roads in the future,
in
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which
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two of them has the function
to connect
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the current
site
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with the farmland area. There will
also
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be several public infrastructures built,
such
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as
playground
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playgrounds
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,
school
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schools
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, medical
centre
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centres
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, and shops. In the planned
site
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, there will be no factories left.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words site with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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