The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown Below. Leisure time in a typical week in hours – by sex and employment status, 1998-1999.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown 

Below.

Leisure time in a typical week in hours –

by sex and employment status, 1998-1999.
The bar chart details how
many
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much
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free
time
per week, in
hours
,
that
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apply
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males and females from five employment status
categories
(
full
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full-time
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time
,
part
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part-time
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time
, unemployed, retired, and housewives)
in
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from
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1998 to 1999. Looking from an
overall
persepctive
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perspective
, it is readily apparent that
men
mostly had more
time
off than
women
, in three status
group
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groups
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,
while
in the other 2
categories
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categories,
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there were no data for
men
. The amount of free
hours
for unemployed and retired
categories
from both
gender
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genders
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were quite similar and the highest,
it
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apply
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was just over 80
hours
per week for
men
and approximately 70
hours
for
women
. These numbers were nearly doubled compared with the next most-highest, which was
full
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full-time
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time
employed, about 47
hours
for
men
and roughly 40
hours
for
women
. For the
part
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part-time
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time
and
houswives
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housewives
categories
, it was only provided females' free
time
data in those period years. Ladies who had a
part
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part-time
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time
job acquired off
hours
nearly the same
with
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as
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full
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full-time
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time
employed
women
, about 40
hours
.
While
housewives
women
had approximately 50
hours
free
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of free
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time
per week.
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