the diagram below shows the stages in the recycling of aluminium drinks cans. Summaris the information by selectin and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The diagram below illustrates how to recycle
aluminium
beverage cans.
Overall
,it is a cycle process and has six stages starting from collecting canes ,transporting, processing and final product ready for sale.
In the collection centre clearly separated cans to particular bins then
, collected items are transported by tracks.In the recycling centre old cans are cleaned and melted to liquid aluminium
using high temperatures. Then
after the cooled liquid was converted to the new aluminium
solid bars.After following these stages aluminium
bars are formed aluminium
thin rolls by machines.
These aluminium
rolls are manufactured beverage bottles using specialized machines then
labelled and filled with flavoured fruit juice. Finally
, the filled soft drinks are stored in the drinking machines and ready to use in supermarkets. After using these packages they are again again
recycled.Remove the redundancy
apply
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