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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, The United Kingdom and Japan in the year 2009

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, The United Kingdom and Japan in the year 2009
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The bar chart illustrates data about the percentage of consumption for five different categories with regard to 4 different countries, which are the United States,
Canada
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, The United
Kingdom
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 and
Japan
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 in 2009.
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it is clear that
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 housing merchants and services contain the highest proportion in 4 countries.
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, Clothing and healthcare accounted for the lowest share among the five sectors. As regards
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highest expenditures, the United States spent over one-fifth of its total spending on accommodations , followed by 24% in the United
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, 22% in
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 and 20% in
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.
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,
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 and the United
Kingdom
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 occupied the highest rates in
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 section, 23% and 21% respectively. In terms of transport,
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 consumed the most, for one-fifth,
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 only accounted for one in ten. Turning to the remaining data, medical expenses made up 8% in the United States, contrary to the United
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 with a mere 2% in total,
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 and
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 took the same place, which was 4%. What’s more, Canadians spent more than 5% on clothing products, followed by a range from 4% to 5% in other regions.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, kingdom, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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