The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
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ownership and education level by 2002~2010.
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, all of grahps are getting higher than the past year. In the
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ownership, the percentage of 2002 was almost 60% and it growed up by every year. The middle grahp: 2006 is higer
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60% and the
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graph: 2010 is bellow
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80%. So, 2002 up to 2010 almost 30% of
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ownership growed up. Next in level of education, both bars 2002 and 2010 was the least percentage at "No high school diploma" and the highest percentage was "Postgraduate qualification" for both graphs. All of the graphs appers, when people get higher education levels the
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ownerships are increasing beside it.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • population demographics
  • educational attainment
  • disparities
  • technological advancement
  • digital divide
  • market penetration
  • socio-economic factors
  • predictive insights
  • statistical significance
  • longitudinal study
  • accessibility
  • affordability
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