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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The table chart illustrates the information about underground railway systems. The data is available for six main cities with
date
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dates
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 opened and counted in millions of
passenger
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passengers
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.
Overall
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, the oldest railway
is
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in
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London
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in London
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, but Tokyo
had
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has
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 the largest one London was the first who
opened
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open
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underground
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an underground
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 railway system, but even though London had more passengers in
year
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a year
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 than Washington, Kyoto and Los Angeles together.
Different
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The difference
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 between Paris and Tokyo in kilometers was 44 , but in Tokyo people used
this
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 thing more. During
this
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 time, despite
other
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the other
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 three cities
are
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being
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 newer, it consists
less
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fewer
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 and passengers.
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, Kyoto and Washington had a huge difference (more than 100 km).
Interesting
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The interesting
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 thing to notice
,
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apply
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 is that difference between Kyoto’s and Los Angeles’s
kilometers
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kilometres
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 is 17km,
passengers’s
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passengers
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 difference was 5 million

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inaugurated
  • route length
  • passenger capacity
  • urban sprawl
  • public transport
  • technological advancements
  • economic contribution
  • industrial growth
  • population density
  • network expansion
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