The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The table chart illustrates the information about underground railway systems. The data is available for six main cities with
date
opened and counted in millions of Fix the agreement mistake
dates
passenger
.
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passengers
Overall
, the oldest railway is
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in
London
, but Tokyo Change preposition
in London
had
the largest one
London was the first who Wrong verb form
has
opened
Wrong verb form
open
underground
railway system, but even though London had more passengers in Correct article usage
an underground
year
than Washington, Kyoto and Los Angeles together. Add an article
a year
the year
Different
between Paris and Tokyo in kilometers was 44 , but in Tokyo people used Correct your spelling
The difference
this
thing more.
During this
time, despite other
three cities Correct article usage
the other
are
newer, it consists Wrong verb form
being
less
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fewer
kilometers
and passengers. Change the spelling
kilometres
Also
, Kyoto and Washington had a huge difference (more than 100 km).
Interesting
thing to noticeAdd an article
The interesting
An interesting
,
is that difference between Kyoto’s and Los Angeles’s Remove the comma
apply
kilometers
is 17km, Change the spelling
kilometres
passengers’s
difference was 5 millionChange noun form
passengers
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