Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

People hold different views about government funds. The use of government investment triggers heated discussion on social media platforms with many people having diverged
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relaxation in daily life and lifting the well-being of people will approve
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Task Achievement
Your introduction should clearly present your standpoint on the topic. Avoid vague statements and ensure that it's clear whether you agree or disagree with the statement given.
Task Achievement
Develop your argument by offering specific reasons for your viewpoint. Include clear main points with relevant examples. This strengthens your essay significantly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on a more logical essay structure. Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs, each with a clear topic sentence and supporting sentences that develop the idea.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that your essay includes both an introduction and a conclusion. The conclusion should summarize the points discussed and restate your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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