The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The pie chart displays what one university's graduating Anthropology students went on to do after
completenig
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completing
their undergraduate degree,
while
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the table illustrates how much those students earned after 5 years.
Overall
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, the majority of graduates went on the full-time jobs and those who did government work had the highest salary. Just over a half of graduates went on the full-time jobs, compared with only 15% of students, who chose a part-time job and 12% of unemployed individuals.
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, some graduates choose part-time or full-time postgrad study at 5% and 8%, respectively. After 5 years, freelance consultants and government sector employees had an equal
percentages
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, which is 80% of workers, who earned more than $75,000,
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those, who worked in the private sector were only 55% with that salary.
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, the proportion of employees in the two smallest categories is equal in the first two types of employment,
however
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, the private companies' workers had double the percentage, compared with the previous two types.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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