The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

Ramarkable

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Remarkable

information is provided regarding the amount of junk food consumption in Britain, over a 20-year interval, commencing in 1970 and culminating in 1990, by the given line bar. From an

overall

view, it can be seen that despite pizza, the use of

hamburger

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hamburgers

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and

fish

& chips gained popularity among people,

while

fish

and chips were by far the most used than the other ones in the second half of the period. By a closer examination, it is obvious that

fish

and chips stood at 80

grams

in 1970 before it had a significant rise with a positive slope to 500

grams

in 1990. Despite the fact that Pizza had the highest consumption in 1970 with 300

grams

, it experienced a

fluctuated

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fluctuating

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trend which decreased to the vicinity of 200

grams

before it settled down in 1980. Turning to Hamburger which had a similar trend to

fish

, but to

smaller

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a smaller

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extent, it started at about 30

grams

which was the lowest one, after that it grew to the near of 300

grams

by the end of the period.

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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

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