The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

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information is provided regarding the amount of junk food consumption in Britain, over a 20-year interval, commencing in 1970 and culminating in 1990, by the given line bar. From an

overall

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view, it can be seen that despite pizza, the use of

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and

fish

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& chips gained popularity among people,

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fish

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and chips were by far the most used than the other ones in the second half of the period. By a closer examination, it is obvious that

fish

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and chips stood at 80

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in 1970 before it had a significant rise with a positive slope to 500

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in 1990. Despite the fact that Pizza had the highest consumption in 1970 with 300

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, it experienced a

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trend which decreased to the vicinity of 200

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before it settled down in 1980. Turning to Hamburger which had a similar trend to

fish

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, but to

smaller

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a smaller

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extent, it started at about 30

grams

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which was the lowest one, after that it grew to the near of 300

grams

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by the end of the period.

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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179 words

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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

Many countries raise fuel prices to deal successfully with problems of traffic and polluon. What effects do you think this move can have? What other measures do you think can be taken to reduce traffic and pollution ?

Some companies use a lot of packaging when selling their products. Why is this? Is it a good thing?