The chart below show the percentage of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other language in addition to english, in 2000 and 2010.

The chart below show the percentage of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other language in addition to english, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie graphs illustrate the proportion of English university pupils who
able
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to speak
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foreign
languages
,
such
as German,
Spanish
, and French, between 2000 and 2010. At a glance, what
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out from the given figure is that most of those
students
can communicate in
Spanish
,
whereas
the number of British
students
who
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to speak in other
languages
declined about two times in 2010 compared to that of 2000. Looking at the chart in 2000, more closely,
Spanish
speakers dominated the majority part of English
students
who had the talent to speak other
languages
at 30 %, followed by university learners who cannot communicate in other
languages
at 20%.
Moreover
, it is interesting to note that those
students
who can speak French and another language made up the same ratio at 15%, which is
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to the percentages of
students
who can communicate in German and two other
languages
that are responsible for the resemblance ratio at 10%. In 2010, part
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the number of English
students
who can speak
Spanish
which
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took a predominant proportion at 35%. The ratio of other foreign
languages
constituted in different percentage compared to those in 2000. Interestingly, the proportion of
students
who can speak another language
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for 20%;
however
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accounted for 10% in each
languages
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