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Band 4

Some people feel that governments should take a large portion of people's salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there are
to
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 many individuals
feel
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 that
whether
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the
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governments should
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 a significant amount of money from the
residence
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residents
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 in order to upgrade facilities. Others feel that
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 payments of
taxes
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 are
unwelcome
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 strategy. I
am totally disagree
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 with these
statments
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statements
, but in some cases
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helps
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for
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short
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terms
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. Convincing arguments can be made that some countries are able to take an enormous number of money from their own residence to achieve facility service.
This
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 kind of method might create a
collaporation
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collaboration
 between both the administration and the
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 to improve the quality of the cities.
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,
share
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these money
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also
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 help the government to open a several type of jobs and
business
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businesses
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which
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 more
opprotunities
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opportunities
 will appear.
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,
due to
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 as carona diseases some countries are going throw
people
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 salaries in order to survive. Research has found that as long as there a high
taxes
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 in every single
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 in
this
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 life
their
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 will always be
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homeless and people who are suffering to live. The fundamental reason for
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 is
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high
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taxes
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 will properly
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affect
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thoes
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those
how
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who
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have
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low
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a low
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salary
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salaries
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, and they will keep fighting between how to pay
taxes
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 and how to feed
them selves
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themselves
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.
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, even when individuals
had
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 in
the
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salary, the
countinous
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continuous
parchase
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purchase
purchased
 by the taxe will keep them in the same place and they will feel futility. In conclusion,
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as I
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 mentioned
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at
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 the previous paragraphs above, both
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of
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apply
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hight
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high
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taxes
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 and taking
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a large
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large
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a large
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propution
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proportion
 of
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people's
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people
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people's
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salaries
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salary
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salaries
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 to achieve government tasks would
considered
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apply
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as
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a significant problem. From my
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perspective
prespective
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i
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I
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beleive
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believe
 that
These strategy
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this strategy
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 will make tomorrow
hurder
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harder
 and
administration
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the administration
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structure
Ensure the essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The introduction should clearly state the topic and your position, while the conclusion should summarize the main points and restate your opinion.
coherence
Work on organizing ideas more logically and coherently. Use paragraphs effectively, with each one containing a central idea and supporting sentences. Transition smoothly between ideas and paragraphs.
accuracy
Avoid spelling and grammatical errors, as these can hinder understanding. Proofreading your essay can help minimize these mistakes.
support
Provide clear, relevant examples to support your points. The examples should directly relate to the argument you are making and be explained in enough detail to be persuasive.
task response
Make sure to address the prompt fully by discussing both views presented in the essay question and providing your own opinion. Your response should demonstrate a clear understanding and engagement with the topic.
development
Expand on your ideas to fully develop your arguments. The essay requires a more in-depth exploration of the points made to adequately discuss the topic.
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