The leaders or directors of organizations are often older people. But some people say that young people can also be a leader. Do you agree or disagree?
Leadership is not the product of age. Over recent years there
has
been discussions that came Change the verb form
have
into
light which speaks about Change preposition
to
young
generation Correct article usage
the young
equally
capable of higher management positions in a Add a missing verb
being equally
company
as the older pleople
. Correct your spelling
people
Although
there are arguments on both sides but
I strongly Remove the conjunction
apply
belive
that older leaders and directors who have outstanding experience Correct your spelling
believe
of
life Change preposition
in
as well as
industry
they are working in are the better fit.
Few arguments Add an article
the industry
put
forward in favour of fresh individuals who are excellent in their work and are gradually promoted to Add a missing verb
are put
the
management roles in the early stage of their Correct article usage
apply
life
. In that Fix the agreement mistake
lives
case
younger management tends to be more open to modern ideas and changes which Add a comma
case,
consequences
positive growth. Verb problem
results in
In addition
, company
will be ready to face any challenges in Add an article
the company
todays
world as they have the strongest and Change to a genitive case
today's
up to date
manpower.
Add a hyphen
up-to-date
However
, there are
more number of convincing arguments that says having old experienced individuals in leadership Change the verb form
is
role
keeps the Fix the agreement mistake
roles
company
stable economicaly
Correct your spelling
economically
have
great public relations.
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
For
instance
there was a Add a comma
instance,
reserch
done by university students that says the working environment in a Correct your spelling
research
company
with old school
leaders and managers Add a hyphen
old-school
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
60
% more positive work environment as Correct article usage
a 60
compare
to Change the form of the verb
compared
the
newly founded Correct article usage
a
company
with fresh minded
leaders. Not only Add a hyphen
fresh-minded
this
Change the determiner
these
olders
individuals have extensive work experience as they have worked for more Correct your spelling
older
that
20 years which leads to them knowing the Correct your spelling
than
fappropriate
acts to run a Correct your spelling
appropriate
sucessfull
Correct your spelling
successful
company
.
To conclude
, it is evident that both generations are capable of running the company
smoothly. In contrast
to this
opinion, I would argue that old people have leaned
a lot from their experience andCorrect your spelling
learned
a
great fit for these roles.Add a missing verb
are a
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