The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the success rate of
female
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females
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and
male
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males
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in passing their driving test in a particular Asian country over a 30-year period from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
, women successfully passed their driving test more than men throughout the period. The percentage for women reached its peak in 2000 before it went down slightly in 2010,
whereas
men increased steadily and did not change over the following ten years. In 1980, the proportion of women who passed the driving test stood just below 50%.
Then
, it rose moderately in 1990 to above 50%.
Subsequently
, there was a significant rise to almost 70% in 2000.
However
, 2010 saw a small decrease to roughly 65%.
On the other hand
, men's success rate in passing the driving tests experienced regular growth
then
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remained unchanged for the remainder of the period. In 1980, the percentage stood just under 30%.
This
number continuously grew and got to nearly 50% in 2000.
Finally
, the rate levelled out until the end of the year.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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