many parts of the world people are relying more and more on prepared food from grocery stores and restaurants because they are too busy to cook at home .this is bad because home cooked food is much better for us to what extend do you agree or disagree ?
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meals are bad for us as Correct your spelling
prepared
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community
indvisulas
.
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individuals
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Cooked
food
that are
ready to eat is not as healthy as freshly Change the verb form
is
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cooked
food
at home.
Seconedly
it teaches us to be Correct your spelling
Secondly
lazzy
, materialistic, and more Correct your spelling
lazy
inconfident
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confident
Also
it invades our privacy and gives Add a comma
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corporate
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power with the information, and insights Correct your spelling
separate
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our Change preposition
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preferences
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for
food
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world capitalism more and more to eat our societies
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to the point we don't need to get married or be in a family and have Correct your spelling
individuals
a
normal healthy home Correct article usage
apply
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cooked
food
.
Forth
there are plenty Correct your spelling
Fourth
ways
to have Change preposition
of ways
home coocked
meals and make it Correct your spelling
home-cocked
last
a week without relying on corporate to make your own food
.
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Cooking
food
at the house enables us to learn , teaches us patience , and make
the new generation of chefs by innovating and exploring new things .
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makes
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prepared
food
is not a stigma or shameful , and it's okay to have it occasionally without relying on it .
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do disagree with relying on prepared Change the capitalization
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for whatever reasons you make for yourself, be it busy or lazzy
, with the right time management you can make your own mealsCorrect your spelling
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