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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the proportion of males and females who passed the driving
test
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 in one unnamed Asian country between 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, at first glance, it is evident that women present a higher driving
test
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 pass rate compared to men over the timeframe.
To begin
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 with, women's passing rate in
the
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driving tests stood at 48% in 1980 and gradually increased to just over half in 1990, and the graph reached a peak at 68% in 2000. The percentage slightly decreased to 65% in 2010.
On the other hand
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, men's
pass
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 rate
in
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 the driving
test
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begin
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 at less than 30%, much less than in the women group, but
then
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 the percentage significantly rises to 38% in 1990 and 49% in 2000 and remains stable for the next 10 years. In conclusion, for 30 years females always show the highest rates of passing the driving
test
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 compared to males.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words test with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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