The graph belw shows theb percerntage of female workers and workers aged 50 or above in the workforce. summarise thevinformaion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph belw shows theb percerntage of female workers and workers aged 50 or above in the workforce. summarise thevinformaion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph belw shows theb percerntage of female workers and workers aged 50 or above in the workforce. summarise thevinformaion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
figure
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female
workers
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and
workers
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who
had
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aged above 50 in the United
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kingdom
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.
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in
United
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the United
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kingdom
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the
pecentage
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percentage
of
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females
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female
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workforce grew well when compared to the people who had attained the age of half of
century
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a century
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.
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Moreover
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the
Uited
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United
kingdom
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had
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increased their
both
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apply
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workforces
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workforce
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between
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over
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various years.
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Initially
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the United
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kingdom
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had only 37% of
females
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who went for work.After
that
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the
figure
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of women
workers
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rose steadily to the end of 2019.In 1980 and 1990 the growth of women employees had
increasedslightly
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increased slightly
to 40% and 42% respectively.In
middle
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of those
years
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the
figure
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had a small fluctuation.
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contrast
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the proportion of the aged people had only started in
year
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1990. In 1990 the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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citizens who worked
with
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age above 50.They were only 21%
in
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of
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population
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the population
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.
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However
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the proportion of both female
workers
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and aged
workers
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had climbed to end of the year 2019.In 2000 and 2010 the workforce of
females
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grew consistently to 45% and 46% respectively.
By
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contrast
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the
figure
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of
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for
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aged
workers
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had climbed only around 22% and 23% respectively.It was too low
percentage
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when compared to the female
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workers
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worker's
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population.
Atlast
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both
females
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and 50
above aged
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above-aged
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workers
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climbed to their peak
approximately
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at approximately
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47% and 32% in 2019 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, workers, kingdom, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 3 times.
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