The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces over a period of 5 years.

The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces over a period of 5 years.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion change of international
graduates
students in several Canadian provinces over 5 years.
Overall
, all the regions display a similar pattern with a
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increasing number of international
graduates
in 2006.
To begin
with, in 2001, there were three provinces (New Brunswick, Nova Scotia, and Quebec) that already presented a percentage of International
graduates
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students with more than 5%. In the next 5 years, the amount of international
graduates
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students significantly rose to more than 10% for New Brunswick and Nova Scotia, but Quebec only shows moderate growth to about 8%.
On the other hand
, in 2001, the other remaining regions (Alberta, British Columbia, Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador, and Ontario) began at less than one in twenty. All of the provinces show a moderate growth to around 6 to 7%, except British Columbia
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presents a rapid growth from 4% to 11% over the 5-year period.
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