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A growing number of people rely on restaurants and convenience food (frozen food and packaged meals) rather than home-cooked food to supply most of their meals. What are the advantages and disadvantages of eating this way?

#people #restaurants #convenience #food #meals
The portion of
people
used
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who used
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 to rely on restaurants and frozen
food
 or package meals
increase
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increased
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 over and over these days , rather than cooking
in
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at
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 home to provide most of the meals .
This
 essay will argue that fast
food
 can be a fast solution
to
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for
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whom
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those who
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 don'
t
 have
time
 to cook like
employers
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employees
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,
also
 it's
help
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helps
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 to save
time
 in many solutions.But at the same
time
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time,
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 it could lead to many
of
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apply
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consequences like
people
 may get sick
due to
 unclean
food
 , and it's consuming lots of money. On
one
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the one
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 hand , restaurants become
first
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the first
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 option
to
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for
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people
 who working for
along
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a long
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time
 and they don'
t
 have that much
of
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apply
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space and the
time
 to
ccok
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cook
,so they
prefering
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prefer to
 pick a lunch or
heating
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heat
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 a frozen
food
into
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in
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microwave
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the microwave
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 to eat it.
Also
,in celebrations and
activites
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activities
 we don'
t
 have that much of hours to spend
it
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apply
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on
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apply
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making different dishes ,so we choose to call a
food
 organization to care of the
food
 part.
For example
, in the
last
 5 years number of
food
organizitions
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organisations
rised
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raised
risen
rise
 nearly to 40%.
On the other hand
 , relying on
food
 trucks and package meals can bring
a
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apply
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bad results. Some of the
cheifs
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chiefs
chefs
 and cookers in the restaurants don'
t
 care about the
ingrediants
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ingredients
cleanless
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cleanliness
clean less
while
 they cooking so it's may result
to get
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in getting
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poission
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poison
permission
 or
stomache
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stomach
 pain after finishing
the
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apply
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dinner.
Moreover
 ,
over using
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overusing
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 to buy fast
food
everyday
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every day
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 consuming lots of cash and
people
 will not be able to buy
there
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their
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 needs in order
of
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to
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 spend the dollars on
lunchs
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lunch
lunches
.
For example
 , in 2020 dollars
spending
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spent
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 on fast
food
consuming
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consumed
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 about 50%
on
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of
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 an
empolyer
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employer
employee
 salary.
To conclude
 ,
although
people
be in
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apply
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nned
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need
 to get fast
food
 in some situations , they should consider the bad aspects of it like getting sick and
consume
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consuming
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 large
portion
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portions
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 of dollars .
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