The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1972 and 2000 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1972 and 2000 by four different modes of transport.
The line chart demonstrates how many products were transported via four different methods of transportation in the UK over a twenty-eight-year
period
from 1972 to 2000.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that
although
transporting by road was the most popular mode,
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least
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over the
period
in question.
Also
evident is, in 1972 water and rail as the two means of transportation were
same
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in popularity at about 40 million tonnes.
however
, despite the fact that the former rose considerably to over 60 in 2000, the alter
fluctuaded
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fluctuated
fluctuate
over the studied
period
and
at the end
of
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got back to 40. As can be seen, in 1992
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the counts
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counts
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for
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the pipeline
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pipeline
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was just over 0 and after a sharp climb in
1976
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it increased to around 20,
whereas
, it stayed fixed by 2000.
Conversly
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Conversely
,
road
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roads
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witnessed a sharp increase from about 70 and peaked at just under 100 in 2000 and remained the most popular
mean
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means
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of transportation over the mentioned
period
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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